tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9112265701362847312.post506515344564213468..comments2023-07-27T21:22:27.337+12:00Comments on Room 5 @ Melville Intermediate School: Melville Intermediate - Jamies Holiday RecountM Webbhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04213006352175006579noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9112265701362847312.post-62907520928041492792013-02-18T14:40:29.463+13:002013-02-18T14:40:29.463+13:00Wow Jamie,
This is a really good story!
Bye!!!!!!!...Wow Jamie,<br />This is a really good story!<br />Bye!!!!!!!! :)<br /><br />Jamie<br />Room 5<br />Melville Intermediate<br />Hamilton<br />New ZealandJamiehttp://melvilleroom8.blogspot.co.nz/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9112265701362847312.post-15002040460834799742013-02-18T14:35:36.956+13:002013-02-18T14:35:36.956+13:00Hey Jamie
Cool as story. You made me laugh when Ky...Hey Jamie<br />Cool as story. You made me laugh when Kylie fell off her chair and when you tripped over the chair and the whole Shopping centre looked at you :) LOL<br />Cant wait to see you at School, even though im looking at you right now :) :) :) :)<br /><br />Elizabeth<br />Room 5<br />Melville Int.School<br />Hamilton<br />New ZealandElizabethhttp://melvilleroom8.blogspot.co.nznoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9112265701362847312.post-20859355724566683812013-02-13T11:30:12.784+13:002013-02-13T11:30:12.784+13:00Hi Jamie, you wrote a cool recount. Lots of us we...Hi Jamie, you wrote a cool recount. Lots of us went to see that movie and really liked it. Megan's favourite character was Sandman. Please come and see our class blog www.roomrturaki.blogspot.co.nz<br /><br />Thank you again for sharing your story!Room Rhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00556312414779587098noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9112265701362847312.post-13236050539839689452013-02-13T08:39:13.582+13:002013-02-13T08:39:13.582+13:00You'll have to 'Believe!' me Jamie, I ...You'll have to 'Believe!' me Jamie, I found a lot to admire in your post. <br /><br />You had a great title; upbeat and positive! <br /><br />I like the way your post started: <br /><br />"The room rolled with laughter as my favourite part of the movie came on." <br /><br />I liked this because you didn't start at the beginning of the story, but somewhere in the middle and yet your story made sense. <br /><br />Great used of a verb there too: 'The audience rolled with laughter'. It paints a picture.<br /><br />Good use of adjectives: 'brave, cheerful, kind surprising'. <br /><br />A good contrast in your post when talking about the villain: 'Pitch Black'. Describing him as 'mean, evil, rude and pitch black!' is a good pen picture.<br /><br />A good plot summary follows. You communicate your enjoyment of the movie especially when Kylie fell off her seat.<br /><br />'I had the best time of my life!' <br />is an effective sentence to finish off your post.<br /><br />Given Kylie in the cinema and yourself in McDonalds, I hope no chairs were hurt in the writing of this recount! (Joke!)<br /><br />With every good wish<br />Merry Beau (Class Teacher) 2nd Class Room 6Merry Beau and 2nd Class Room 6http://www.merrybeau.edublogs.orgnoreply@blogger.com